Monday, August 17, 2009

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here my essay:



The Battle of Sexes



Society plays major role that influences the views of young adults towards their lives. One of the key impacts in the societal influences on the perceptions that men and women have in determining their roles in society. Men and women are both driven by similar motivations, but differ in their approaches and level of importance to love, money and careers.



First at all, love is one of the motivations that both males and females desire, but have different approach to express love. Love for my personal view is the strongest emotion that a person can have to express to a love one and change the way one views the world. Most of young male adults don鈥檛 want a serious relationship because they are afraid to commit to one person for a long period of time. The term 鈥渓ove鈥?for men usually means sex in their manly minds. 鈥淢en view sex as the true expression of love and usually think a relationship hasn鈥檛 even started until it includes sex鈥?(King). Society today has change the way males think about love. 鈥淎 male thinks about sex every seven seconds on average鈥?(King). One of the weaknesses for men is that they don鈥檛 know the differences between sex and love. They also can鈥檛 express love as women do. On the other hand, love is a big deal for women. Most of the women want a serious relationship. Women are very emotional and sentimental person. They want the emotional and physical connection among the opposite sex. When women think about love, they mostly think about the chemistry between two people who can care deeply and impact one鈥檚 life. Most of the young adults today are usually looking for a future husband beside of focusing of their careers.

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